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Hi Everybody.

I should not do this - I really should not post this fiction in the middle of my exam periode, but hell I can't stand waiting on my German exam anymore, I need something to do. I can not promise update on sudden days, they will come when I have the time, and frankly I really wanted to write the first five chapters, but the first chapter is still in the work. Sadly!

I shouldn't be posting this, because I still have some fics I need to catch up on; and Claire if you are reading this - I will read your fic as soon as I have the time! Love Ya Babe :-*

I also need to thank Hatice, because she helped me make the introduction much better than it was to begin with. She is the reason I can post this at all - so hun thank you so much I love you :-* <3

Some background information;

Rating: THIS IS NOT A FOOTBALLER FAN FICTON! I wanted to try making a non-footballer's Fiction and I think we should have child board with non-footballer fiction. I have also wanted to make one in a long time, and I got the idea suddenly when I was on my way back home from school.

Category: A little bit of everything I think?

Summary: Annabella Montez leaves behind her four best friends, after having committed suicide for unknown reasons. The girls will now have to get back to their everyday life ? there will be filled with different problems, which they will have to solve themselves. Will Annabella suicide turn up and down on all their lifes? Will it give them experience both bad and good? Or will it all turn into hell? Take a journey into the four girls life?s and see what will happen when they hit the reality and realise that they will have to grow up soon.

Disclaimer: All the characters are fictional, though I may relate to my friends at time ? but I own the character in this story. It?s fictional and not real!

Author's Note: It may come across a bit boring in the start, but I will try to make it excited as soon as possibly, just need time to tell you how the girls are and what they stand for. I hope you will like it :-*

Please do comment I absolutely love them - I'm a comment whore. ::lol::

Peace Out (;
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Re: Confessions Of Teenage Lifes [Chapter 1; July 8 - 2008]
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Confessions Of Teenage Lifes

Introduction:

I remember the day of my death very clearly. It was in mid May ? the 14th to be exact, the hottest day of the year in Chicago ? 38 degrees. It was Saturday and the sprinklers had been turn on in the gardens all day, so they wouldn?t dry out. I remember how the flowers smelled and how the bees were buzzing in the gardens. I remember the birds singing like they had never done before. I remember Mr. and Mrs. Johnson had been working at their garden, to win ?Chicago?s finest garden? prize of the year. I remember our pool guy walking around cleaning the pool topless, not noticing me looking at him, from one of the deck-chairs in our garden. I remember the small children on Madison Lane running around on the street playing barefooted, and the parents letting them, because of the rare traffic on the street. I remember Mike Hamilton had been working on his truck, a young, handsome man who always had the ability to catch not only my attention but also the attention of my friends. When it came to Mike, we ? and I mean me and the girls here ? we usually had a specific image of him in our mind: mysterious, a man who probably had a thick folder at the police station, quiet when it came to other neighbours which lead parents, specially mothers, to talk behind his back as none had the guts to talk to him personally. I remember one incident pretty well, as if it would have been occurred just yesterday. It had been a sunny afternoon again, the sun was shining and all of us hadn?t known what to do in our spare time so we had started to spy on him, a plan which had backfired as he had caught us. The moment when he had seen us, we ran away but there had been something in me deep down and I had turned around, just for being able to see him. Our eyes had blocked and his eyes had been digging into my soul, a moment I will never forget. His eyes. His eyes had been.... I can?t even describe them. I remember Diane Sawyer had been washing her car in small short and a bikini top short on pure purpose because she always had been aware of the glances men would give her. She had been in her element and had enjoyed every second of attention she had got. I remember my big brother had taken of on his motorcycle, in the morning after yet another fight with my parents ? about whether he should attend school again, or not. I remember Mrs. Jones had been watering her beautiful flowers in the garden, and I remembering Leah reading one of her books on the front porch ? she had looked so peaceful, so in thoughts, deeply in thoughts. Books had always been her way to run away from reality and a way to lose her in a fictional world. Leah had looked just beautiful because her innocence had been clearly visible to everyone. This cute smile, the glow in her eyes while she had been reading her book. I remember seeing Gabriella coming home from a shopping trip with her mother, they had been discussing whether Gaby should be allowed to go to her college boyfriend?s birthday party; she never got around since she got the message about my sudden death. I remember Megan was playing soccer with her little brothers in their backyard, right next to my house. She had waved several times at me ? laughing and smiling! I remember hearing Victoria throwing one of her mother?s expensive vases against the wall and it had shattered into little pieces of glass. They had argued with each other because she had bought yet another fur, something Victoria couldn?t approve and eventually she had lost her temper again. I remember I had laughed quietly about her mother?s expression, a priceless look I will never forget.

I remember a lot of things from that day, but there is one thing I remember the most. It was the last time with my four friends ? my best friends! We had all been so excited ? we had planned our summer trip to Boston late that morning, to visit Leah?s aunt. We had planned everything down to the last details and the girls had been so excited. It was the first year we weren?t going on summer camp ? which our parents had required the last couple of years. We would live in Leah?s aunt?s wooden cottage by the lake, and gossip about the new school year, and which guys we were planning to make out with, an experience which everyone of us wanted to gain desperately. It should have been OUR vacation, our days, full of happiness and joy. We had planned everything, just everything and it still breaks my heart whenever I remember our conversations whenever we had talked about our plans, I get teary eyes whenever I remember and hear the excitement out of the girl?s voices. Have I been fair towards them? Have I?

I ruined it! I didn?t mean to ? I didn?t mean to hurt them, to leave them alone. It just happened and only I know why; because I never left a note to my parents, to my friends, to anybody! It became a mystery to everybody, a neighbourhood secret, which nobody wanted to mention or talk about.  It is only me who knows everything and I am ready to share my story with you now. Here. This shouldn?t be kept as a secret because may be, may be you can learn out of my mistakes, my thoughts.

I remember the night it all happened. I sat in the living room watching TV. I was home alone yet again; my dad was at some business dinner and my mom at her friend Dory?s place. My parents had had their usual discussion in the morning, which had turn into a fight ? but there was nothing new to that! Although I didn?t know that my sudden death would affect their marriage to the end. My big brother, Jake had still not appeared but I didn?t expect him to either. I remember I had felt a swift of loneliness and had decided to chill in the sofa, though half though the movie the phone had called. It came as a surprise to me, and I didn?t answer before it rang the third time. It was a woman named Allison Doyle, she was speaking fast, but I manage to catch everything she said. I hung up quickly and held my hand in front of my lips ? I couldn?t believe it!

I properly sat there about 5 minutes thinking of what she had just told me. I was scared and angry ? and the angry feelings suddenly came up. I threw a pillow across the room and hit a picture of my parents. How could they? Why had they never told me? I couldn?t deal with this, I just couldn?t!

A thought flew into my brain and although this thought had been wrong and I had known it deep down, I ran down the stairs in the basement. I opened the drawer and pulled it out, it was heavy and big in my small hand, an appliance I have seen often before but never touched before because I always had been too scared of it. Ironical that a small ?thing? like this one in my hands could cause so much damage. I was scared back then as well but this time it wasn?t my fear which won, it was my anger. I could simply not live with this, and then it happened. 

It just happened.

I remember the loud bang clearly, but it was not loud enough to any other human being earshot it. There I was ? on the cold basement floor. My head tilted to the side, and my mouth open. The blood flooded the stone covered floor; it flooded so peacefully and quietly. My body position was awkward, and my before tanned skin went pale the longer time I was laying there.

I was not alive anymore ? I was dead! 

Rain hit the window suddenly ? like a storm had broken out. It was as if God had sent a message to the world, a message which everyone should receive and feel. The before warm air turned into a cold wall and stone hard rain there poured down from the sky ? making the air freezing and clutching violently against the window, which soon were covered by the raindrops. Puddles had already formed on the streets and it became dark, so dark that you properly wouldn?t have been able to see your own hand in front of your nose

Every single person in this world has a destiny ? my destiny had been to create a storm!

My name is Annabella Montez ? I committed suicide on the 14th May 2007, only 16 years old! I lived in a suburban to Chicago, on Madison Lane number 657 ? a peaceful neighbourhood, where there usually didn?t happen things like this. It was a hasty instinct there told me to do it. I left behind my four friends, not knowing that it would have dangerous consequences that it would destroy their friendship, and everything we had build up! I give you the confessions of four different teenage girls ? and the confessions of my life! They never saw how rough this cruel world could be, before I died, before I left them to discover it themselves ? discover it like I did that night!

Here is; Confessions of teenage lifes...
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Author's Note: Here you go. I hope you like and please do comment.
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weeee i get to be first  ;D

Maria I am so proud of you! it was great. It's not the usual thing i read because it's so deep and dark but once i did get started i wanted to know. I want to know what's going on and where you could go with this story. Agh, of course I zoned in on the one guy you put in there... but I'm sure you when you're time opens up you'll be posting your chapters and answering my questions. There are too many to ask at one go, its something that needs to be read a couple of times.

I've got to say that I was really impressed by the descriptions, it's like you can really envision what was happening. It's like you really thought this out (which I know you did) before posting, which makes it even more special. Ah, I am impressed altogether *hugs*. I know you'll do well with this because it has the potential to be as different as you want it to be. And I promise to be here to push you along the way if you start getting as lazy as me to update  :D.

:-* kei

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Wow :]
I liked it, there is so much discription in there that you can actually imagine that your there inside the girl who committed suicide and whats all more the interresting, is what caused her to committ suicide, i know she was on the phone but what exactly did they say?
i love the mistry of it all and it sounds alot like desperate housewives (Y)
which by the way i love that show so there no doubt that il love this story aswell.
i too posted in the middle of my GCSE exams, which is well really werid because i too couldnt wait any longer to start my story.
which is Daries of a "Footballers Girl"

Love it
Raxxie. :-*

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Maria!! *Opens arms for hug* :-*

You posted it! I'm all excited now! *does happy dance* :P I'm so sad! lol

I loved the intro, its a great start hunnie! I love that fact that she is the one that dead and its from her point of view! Can't wait for more hunnie!! :-*

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 :o :o  Oh Wow.....I'm almost speechless.  But this is incredible, the way you describe everyday things and then all of the sudden....BANG.


I wonder what it was the woman told her that made her want to commit such a life changing act though (life changing for those who knew and love her). I mean, I know people who commit suicide are usually in a really bad place but sometimes you wish they realized how much an effect (and therefore how important they are) they had on the people around them when they make these decisions. I have a good hunch this fic will highlight that which is why I look foward to reading more.  :)


Bump soon!  :-* :-* :-*

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MariaBear! *hugs*
I miss you so much :(
I'm sure we'll catch up during the summer!
I just have to say that i LOFFED it and that you *must* bump soon!
Loff you!
Besos :-*

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[Author Note;]

Hey Girls :-*

Thank you so much for commenting, I will reply when I ones upon a time post the next chapter, which can be a really long before I do, because frankly the 1st chapter doesn't work for me yet, and I won't post anything that I'm not satisfied with! This will have to be perfect because I even consider posting it.

Thank you again for reading, it means so much to me - and I hope others will read it, I had hoped it would get more replies, but I should have known since it's not a footballers fiction, but you girls are the best (;
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Mariaaaaa! I love you!

I'm just here to let you know that I got your comment and I will definately be commenting and reading your fiction tomorrow! I'm sure its wonderful and I'll try to do justice with my comment. :)

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OMG. Maria. That was so breathtaking. :o :o

So well written. I really really really liked it.

I didn't know if it was possible for me to engage in a footballer-less story but, this is just so good. Very nice suburban setting. Everything is normal then BOOM. She shoots herself and commits suicide. It was really really surprising and the way you wrote the story was just really intriguing to me. :-*

Reminds me sort of like Desperate Housewives. :D

"It was a woman named Allison Doyle, she was speaking fast, but I manage to catch everything she said. I hung up quickly and held my hand in front of my lips ? I couldn?t believe it!"

This line puzzled me the most. At first, I thought that it was one of her best friends, then I realised that it said "woman" and thought that it had to be someone much older than she was. :-\ So puzzling but, yet so intriguing! I need you to update!

I wanna know what happened! NOW. :P :P

So don't take ages to update like I do, or else I'll hunt you down and make you update myself! :P :P But, I'm only joke. Take your time, but make it quick! ::lol:: :P

Love,
Pragya

Plus, I'm sorry for taking this long to comment! :(

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Kei_sainter: Hey my sweet sugar cube. How are you doing - I'm still a bit sad I kicked you out of 'Footballer & The Fan', now I'll see how I do - hopefully I do well. Now I'm home from Maderia - and gosh you know what? Maderian boys are super cute. We were in a Aqua Park - and lots of gorgeous guys I tell you. There were these boys there were in a crowd - one of them was really cute. Then there was this mixed tupe of guy - looked both Portuguese, Spanish, Italian, Greek - oh such a hottie I tell you. Then there was this type of guy who looked a bit like Nani - now I don't know if you find Nani cute, but I do - but I even think this guy was cuter, if it was not because he and his girlfriend was lying right in front of me - snogging. Tsk! Then there was also a guy who looked like Daniel - not Agger. Have I told you about Daniel? He is the most gorgeous guy I have ever seen - one of my friends from school - friend. Anyways back to the guy - he looked like him, just with brown hair. Wow so many cute guys Kei - you need to go to Portugal. Promise? Also on the hotel - the reseptionist kept saying Ronaldo to me, because I wore a CR t-shirt one day haha. We also trying soemthing where you sit in a big basket and then some "drive" you down in it - I had my Figo shirt and then when we got down people started yelling Criiistiiano Rooonaldo after me, and then they would look at the back and like mumble loudly - oh Fiiiigo.. Haha kind of funny. FIC: NAHA Kei of course I should have known you would get attracked to Mike - Haha. You will see more to him - and some kind of dark secret he is holding, but you wait to see what it is. I'm very glad you read it, even though it was nothing like you use to read, or write. I do kind of tend to write deep and dark stuff, and mix me into something very describable, but I'm glad when I do that you can then see the happening and try to imagen the people in it - even though the girls have not been describe much, but it will come. Right now I just want you to see the how the quiet neighbourhood is. But thanks for commenting hun and glad you like it - see how it went; a month and two day before updating again - good thing I took my computer with me on holiday, because now I have written this chapter and the next. Sometimes it'sjust good not having internet. Haha! Talk to ya soon sweetie. :-*

Raxxie:Hey Rax - how are you doing hun? I saw you and your boyfriend had rounded the 10 month, eh - am I right? If then congratulations, it's hard as a teenager to get a relationship to function. I promise you I will read you fiction - I have actually been looking into it - but then my exams came, and then holiday (have just been in Portugal) now in two days I start at my summer job - but I promise to try read it very soon, okay? FIC: Ah! I'm so glad you can image the whole thing. I love making describtions - it makes me more into the fiction, if you know what I mean? You will have to wait a bit in this story before even getting to know more about Alison Doyle - first the summer holiday is up for the girls, where big changes is going to happen. Uh you caught the 'Desperate Housewifes' in it - actually it's an idea I got from thinking about it. Haha. I love that show too - but I haven't been keeping up on it beause I have gone to a school where you liv for a year and stuff - now I'm home and I'll sure try to catch up. Thanks for commenting hun - luvs ya. :-*

Lydia: Hey Lydz *hugs back* - how are you doing? Hopefully well, and you are still with that boyfriend you found? Hope it is working out for you - and you don't talk to Ze? Or am I wrong? FIC: Uh I'm glad you are excited - you know what I need to read some of your fics - there is so many fics here I need o catch up with - but I have just been on holiday and in two days I start my summer job - I'll have to make some time out for ficcie reading. You know what? Remember when we talked about that funeral stuff - and how to describe, went nothing more and bad for me when I wanted to write it - so after had written I think 5 pages of chapter in Word I deleted it - and then I wrote something new and deleted it - and now I ended up not writing the funeral. But it will come later in the story as some kind of memory - desiced it would be better like that. Thanks for commenting hun - means alot to me. :-*

*José'Bitch*: Hatiiiiiice. Oh my sweet darling. You are the only reason why I have already posted just the intro. If you have not helped me, this story would have been - lets just say nothing like it is now, and thank you again for putting in small things to make it better. I have written even more on the thing I PM'ed you, so it might seem not the same at all - but hopw you like it. Actually as I think I told you in the FF talk's - I have already written the next chapter too, and I most ay I like that one really much. Look forward for you to read it. FIC: Gaah I hope a month and 2 two is fine with you - I mean I first update now - so you can read it and not stressing about your thesis. LOL! How is it going anyway? Hopefully good. Hey and thank god you got some of those old ficcies removed, I really wanted to having them deleted because they kind of interrupt you trying to find a good, but maybe old story - and Dark Angel - even though I don't know who she is - she got a whole lot of fics - damn didn't know you could start so many. But thanks hun for helping you - and I do really need to thank you, and thanks for commenting. :-*

Piri Pez: Pezziiie - my sweet wonderful loving RM fan. Oh I'm back! I look so much forward to go read your updates. Have really been looking forward to that. Just needed to update here before going to read the ones I have left back, while being in Portugal - even though I check some of them. Hopefully me and maybe Miguel - maybe Steven has been brought into the fic by now. FIC: Wow I'm o glad you all commented on the describtions - hope you like them, because I love writing describtions. Haha. You will get to see more of Alison Doyle later - but for now she must rest in your heads, as a mystery - beause right now it's summer holiday for the girls and it's first after those days she will coe back. Muhahaha - you'll have to wait long before finding out, why Annabella commited suicide. Thanks for commenting hun - talk to ya in your story right after here - haha. :-*

Gracy: GRACYYY! I'M SO FUCKING SORRY! I don't know why I never saw it, you should have told me that I didn't made you an author reply, you must have thought I was awful, huh? I feel so sorry because you and Pezzie makes me one everytime - shit! I hate myself right now. So now after I have returned from holiday and I have summer holiday, I do feel like we have catched up after this year, where I have not been much online or active. Thank you for the comment and next time I will remember it, okay? :-*

seekingperfection: PRAGZY! My sweet loving VB fan and a person I can always count at - thanks for helping me in the discussion about whether it was Man U's - RM or Mr. Ronaldo himself being an ass. Sometimes some Man U fan just don't see another perspektive than it the other part there is to blame in all such a big madness. Tsk - let them mess with that! How are you doing by the way? FIC: I really glad you liked it. I didn't ever think I would try for a non- footballer fic. But I think I like writing it much better now - but maybe I'll try for a footballer fic some time. Ih you caught the 'Desperate Housewife' too like Raxxie. It's some idea I got from thinking of the show - but thought I would right about teenagers instead, since I myself canput me in there much better myself. Alison Doyle will be lying as a mystery for you girls, for a long time now. Sorry - but you won't find out anything of what happened in that phone, before after the girls have had their holidays. Soooorry - and sorry for first updating now. Just a bit mess with the first chapter, but now it's written and so is the next chapter too. Thanks so much for commenting hun - it means alot to me. :-*

Chapter 1 is up next. ;D
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Chapter 1:
Rain Always Comes Before Storm

Rain poured down in Oak Point Chicago ? it had been like this for seven days now. It had not stopped since it began on the evening of May 14, not a single moment had it stopped, to take a break ? no it had just kept raining. It had even gotten that far, the news had started to suggest a flood in the little suburban, but the rain was just falling and falling, to only disappear as the came ? covering the already wet asphalt, there had before, been dry and firing hot from the burning sun. 

The streets had been left deserted, with only the puddles to keep it company. It was knocking on the windows in the same rhythm as it had begun, hard and threatening. Sometimes a dog would be let out for a few minutes, only making it bark to come inside, in the warm and cosy house again.   

There were no longer any bees buzzing, or birds singing lovely songs. There were no longer any happy kids, running around barefooted on the street playfully. There were no longer any garden stuff to do; it was now left to the rain, to repair the drought?s damage. There was no longer any possibility to repair your truck, without the rain interrupting your concentration. There was no longer any reason to wash your car almost naked, for attention ? the rain would now take care of it. There were no longer any noises from a motorcycle, driving fast away from a certain driveway. There were no longer any pool guys, cleaning the pool water. There were no longer any book reading on the front porches ? and what would it be good for? The rain would only ruin the papers in the book. There was no longer any shopping done, only the necessary. There were no longer any footballs thrown though the garden with so much force it could break a window. There were no longer any vases thrown into any walls anymore ? no it was all quiet on Madison Lane.

But somehow the neighbourhood had become more beautiful of the sudden rain.

The grass was of a dark green colour, the rain had changed its colour and looks. It now looked healthier than ever before. The trees and bushes had finally begun blossoming ? and the strawberry plants in Mr. and Mrs. Johnson?s garden had finally gotten red berries, instead of green. The vegetables in the vegetables garden seemed fresh now, instead of dried out. The pink hydrangea there was growing up along the Johnsons? house and also had gotten a different colour ? the colour Mr. and Mrs. Johnson had been looking for.

The birds had been hitting in the bird houses, people had been so nice and creative to put up, in various corners of their gardens. At times they would stick their heads out, and go look after food ? to return with a few worms in their mouths, or in a rare occasion fly by a bird bath ? taking a bath or get something to drink.

Kids were now doing indoor activities, as drawing or playing with their new toys. Watching TV or movies with there parents, who were trying to make them forget what had happened, just a week ago. Even though the kids had a hard time understanding why some of their parents were crying, they would assure them that Annabella was in heaven ? a much better place than earth, something their own parents had taught them. The parents would smile and cuddle up in the corner of the sofa, hugging their child and hoping that they would never have to go though this horrible thing.

The pool in Annabella Montez?s garden had been covered through a plastic foil to prevent the rain from flooding into the pool and dirtying the pool water. The rain was dripping down of the different picket fences and leaving a wet trail behind them. The deck chairs were no longer standing by the pool and in the garden beside the Montez family?s household, was Megan Foster?s football lying. It had not been touched since the day Annabella had seen her playing with her brothers under the dazzling sun, a day she could remember as if it had happened just yesterday. Sun rays had caressed their faces and had turned them into angels. Now the ball was lying innocently there, waiting for someone to kick it over the grass but none was there. Not one single person.

Across the street of the Madison Lane number 657, the flowers on Mrs. Jones front porch had gotten a deeper colour. The cushions in the wooden arm chairs placed on the porch had been taken away. There was only one ashtray placed on the little glass coffee table which stood between the chairs. There were now only imagining images of Mrs. Jones watering her plant, at the mailbox, and Leah sitting on the white wooden front porch reading her favorite book.

A couple of houses down from Leah Jones? house, you could see a house named Nymphedora ? written above the big front door. It was a big white concrete covered house built up in the 18th century, with dark brown windows along the walls. The rain had an effect on the house which was not really describable with words. It simply looked beautiful. It had an innocent aura around it ? it seemed so perfect for a family to live in. Here Victoria Harlem was living with her parents and her older sister, Sahara. A family there was far from perfect!   

Gabriella Stevenson was living at the end of the road. Her white Mercedes was parked outside the house; it had not been touched for days now ? even though she had planned a trip up to her boyfriend?s parent?s country cottage. The house was the latest to be build ? and the outstanding details on the house made people take a yet another look. If you looked carefully, you could catch a glimpse of a wooden build tree house, in a big oak, in the backyard. A tree house beautiful made with a man?s bare hands ? a house there had been used to several occasions, but was now drenched from the rain.   

At times you would find Mike Hamilton?s bearded face looking out of his kitchen window, looking in despair. When would this madness stop ? when would the endless rain discontinue falling? He questioned himself every single time looking out. His concerned look, there flexed between four houses. In the past seven days it had been dead ? the houses had been left in silence, not a single sound, not a single move, and not a single emotion had appeared. He would then finally look at the flowers, there had been left just outside Madison Lane number 657. He would shake his head over and over again, still not understanding what the hell had happened. He would then turn around, and go fix something broken in the ram shackled house he bought just six month ago, a place he had thought would make his past disappear ? a past he would more than anything, like to forget.

If you looked at the site of a green concreted house ? you might have seen Diane Sawyer sitting by her fire place ? sulking. No one would go look at houses when it was raining, and no appointments would be made when such a heavy rain was falling, a rain you couldn?t count on to stop. Even though she deep down couldn?t blame anyone of this rain, she was blaming it on one person, a person there had caught her much trouble ? Annabella Montez. She did feel sorry that poor girl, what ever troubles she now had, but deep down she now knew many frustrations would disappear, and when she thought about it ? she felt happy. She may be a cold hard bitch, but she liked it ? and that was the true Diane Sawyer, and she would think again; why should she change herself then.

Had you looked careful, you would have seen a motorcycle standing in the driveway, with all the flowers. A motorcycle there usually was only there a day a time. All though it had not moved in seven days now ? and the rain was now dripping down from it, washing all the dirt of it, and making it look all new.   

A fog was slowly building up around the whole neighborhood. Making it looks like a lost part of the suburban ? a part left to it self, so distant from every other part of Oak Point. But if you looked carefully, then this part may be the most beautiful ? so blinding and comfortable to look at. A place so peaceful and memorable ? a place holding a big secret, a secret there was still lying as a big mystery, a mystery everyone so badly wanted to know the solution of.

In the end the rain was perfect ? perfect for a circumstance like this, and no one disagreed.

?Rain always comes before storm ? was it time for the rain to pass, and the storm to rise? I knew it was time for the storm to raise ? time to changes ? dangerous changes. See it like this; raindrops are pure and innocent, when they are dripping down from the sky, it?s beautiful and peaceful. But as soon as it stops and everything is clear ? you see everything. The troubles are lying just around the corner ? and they will hit like a storm. When I died the changes began to happen ? changes that no one was asking for, but changes that happened. Troubles appeared from every corner, attacking my friends every time they became vulnerable ? they needed to find their own way to protect themselves. They became defensive and emotionless ? and whose fault was it? It was mine; Annabella Montez."
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[Author's Note; Please listen to the song - it's what insprired me to write the chapter and the sadness in the song's intro reminds me of this chapter. Imagen it's a TV show and it's the intro of the episode. Also again thanks to Hatice to helping me to start this chapter. Love you girl. Happy reading. :-*
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Re: Confessions Of Teenage Lifes [Chapter 1; July 8 - 2008]
« Reply #12 on: 8 July 2008, 12:40:01 »
Wow, this chapter was great, as soon as i thought of the rain it kind of reminded and related me to the death, and then at the end of the chapter it says.
"In the end the rain was perfect ? perfect for a circumstance like this, and no one disagreed."
i like that line, its shows everything, and means alot, but in a calming sort of way. :)
and i love how it's so different to the rest of the Fictions here.

I'm good thanks, and yourself?
Thanks, yeah it's around 11 month on the 24th July, i cant quite believe it myself, it can be hard at times cause you just wanna have fun, but youve got to think of your other before doing anything yourself.
Take aslong as you want really, ive got plently more chapters to write yet :).
Tell me about it my Exam's finished on 12th June, so almost a month since ive been off soon, mind i havent done anything constuctive with my time. ::lol::
How was Portugal? damn i wish i had went haha, ive got no abroad holiday this summer, unfortunately.
I still need to find myself a job il try do it that week?
No Problem.

Yeah i havent kept up on Desprate housewives either, i dont think it's on anymore, but it's addicting as much as your storey, :)
Il keep commenting too x

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Re: Confessions Of Teenage Lifes [Chapter 1; July 8 - 2008]
« Reply #13 on: 8 July 2008, 13:10:20 »
Hola sweetie! I just read your lovely comment on my ficcie - THANK YOU SO MUCH - and I just popped in here to say I will read this later on, I'm just about to leave for a late night session at the movies. Sooo I shall read it as soon as I get back. ;D

Love you!

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« Reply #14 on: 9 July 2008, 08:53:25 »
OMG! I love Enrique! I haven't read it yet but I plan on reading it later and leaving you a long wonderful comment! Love you Maria! :-*