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« Reply #15 on: 10 July 2008, 11:48:51 »
Hey sweetie!

How have you been? It feels like its been forever since we chatted! I hope all's well with you.

I've been good. Just summer, Driver's Ed., and volunteering. That's all. Don't worry; I totally got your back. Some people are just really ignorant and can't seem to think outside of the little space that they call their 'brains.' ::) ::lol:: Ah, it just erks me that sometimes somepeople can't shut their yaps. ::lol::
 
Now, onto the fiction. I'm really sad that I won't get to know anything cause its a mystery and all and this suspense feeling is just...strange and so new compared to the lovey dovey Cristiano Ronaldo fictions. :( But, I'll pull through and I'm really excited to see whats really up because the story line seems so intriguing.

This fiction gets better and better. I love the details, especially the changing of the colours in the neighborhood. I thought that it was really powerful how you used that image. :-\ The whole storm idea was so detailed and well thought of; I was really stunned reading this! But, it was a good stunned so its okay. :) And I totally understood all of your descriptions. Like it felt as if I could literally feel it. Like that smell you get after it rains on a summer day: that really burnt wierd asphalt rain mix smell. It was just really good because you know a writers good when he/she makes the reader feel what he/she is writing. ;) :-*

I really liked the sudden change in atmosphere. It was like the rainstorm was symbolic to how she died and the reaction that came from it. For example, how everyone was inside and there was basically no life anywhere other than that of kids and their parents watching T.V. inside or playing board games or something. Very nice contrast, I really liked it. :)

And this line stood out to me; "There were no longer any vases thrown into any walls anymore ? no it was all quiet on Madison Lane." I re-read the paragraph and I realised that everything before that sentence was mostly positive. Like, children playing happily and it being warm and sunny etc. so, I guess that end just gives that feeling of 'nothing being perfect' in the neighborhood. And that behind all the sunny days and the nice environment, lies a deep and dark secret that eventually killed someone.

"Rain always comes before storm ? was it time for the rain to pass, and the storm to rise? I knew it was time for the storm to raise ? time to changes ? dangerous changes. See it like this; raindrops are pure and innocent, when they are dripping down from the sky, it?s beautiful and peaceful. But as soon as it stops and everything is clear ? you see everything. The troubles are lying just around the corner ? and they will hit like a storm."

This was my favorite quote throughout the whoooole entire chapter. The reason I think I liked it is that its so true. I mean, you always get those subtle warning signs and then before you know it, you're hit with a devestation or a tragedy.

Ah, we have a new character? Anabella? Hm, I wonder what she did. ??? So many tiny details! :) I love love love love it! I know it'll prolly be a long while before you reveal any secrets but, still I will be waiting patiently. :P :P

My dear Maria, I loved every sentence of this beautiful update! And I think you should update again!
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« Reply #16 on: 10 July 2008, 22:30:41 »
Well here I am feeling like a complete idiota for not seeing this update earlier but Im here now.  :'(


But wow....just WOW at this update. I love the way you've accurately captured once again how death affects not just one person but everyone around them....especially but having it rain and all. It seems that just as Annabella's life ceased to go on, so did everyone else's and I don't think people who are suicidal have the prescence of mind to understand this. We all understand that they must be in alot of torment or pain but they need our help.  :'( :'(


Powerful message hon, I loved it!  :-* :-* :-*

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« Reply #17 on: 11 July 2008, 19:39:08 »
Hey hun! I'm good thanks you? Yea, I'm still with Dan, happy as ever. Nah, I dont talk to Ze anymore, dont have anything to do with him, we work in the same place, I'm his boss but I dont actual talk to him. Haha, it's ok hun, catch up with mine when you can hun. I've been on holiday I went to Spain for a few days hence why I wasnt online or didnt reply quicker. Ooo, where you working? Yea, I have that with my new fic, I didnt like the second chap and I rewrote it like a thousand times before I posted it. I can't wait hunnie!

The Update : The update wasnt boring in the slightest. I loved it! I love the way you discribed things and you reminded me I needed to wash my car. Mike Hamilton?s bearded face reminds me of my neighbour, I swear thats all he does stands looking out the window, it creepy. I hate rain but I love rain when I'm inside, I love the sound it makes, I think I need a life, lol. I love Enrique Iglesias too! Waiting nicely for the update hun :P Love ya! :-*

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« Reply #18 on: 13 July 2008, 22:48:41 »
Hey Maria!
I'm so sorry for not noticing this before but I did now :D ::lol::
I just love the way you describe things. I'm shit at that and you seem to do it so effortlessly and it fits and it's not too much.
It's just perfect!
Can't wait to read more :D
Loff you :-*

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« Reply #19 on: 21 July 2008, 05:14:17 »
Maria sweetness!! Sorry I didn't get here yesterday like I said  :-\
But I'm here now  :D :D

First to your comment to me: You don't know how happy it made me to hear you describe what happened in Madeira. It's absolutely cold and miserable here right now (a new thing because even though it's been winter for almost 2 months now it still feels like Autumn) and to imagine the things that you experienced sort of brought sun back in my day!!  ;) So I thank you for that, and for the absolute hilarity of people being disappointed when they saw your back and saw "Figo" instead of Cristiano Ronaldo. They must get used to having fans of Cristiano coming to visit the island eh?  ::lol:: I have to say business is probably booming there because of him-- where there many tourists?

To the fic: I totally get what you mean about showing how quiet it is and I thought you did a brilliant job of showing it. Even just the motorcycle getting washed by the rain was an image that has stuck to my head. If anything though, I think it's a bit TOO quiet-- although "the calm before the storm" obviously needs to be, right? I like how from the vibrant characters you had in the Intro-- laughing, fighting, doing chores-- it was a stark contrast which really foreshadows change in the air.

Hahaha  you know what mate? I left high school English years ago now, but this is the kind of story that would have been one that we would've had to analyse and write essays on-- meaning it's you've got something pretty special here. Even without dialogue you're able to draw a reader in and the length of the chapters are perfect. But I want to suggest to you to hold back on explaining everything... give the reader the chance to imagine stuff on their own, it builds up curiosity and it allows for interpretation. ;)

But  :-[ don't listen too much to me. I know that you know what you're writing about so if what I'm saying is completely contradictory to what you're hoping to achieve feel free to throw stuff at me.  ::lol:: Preferably food :D
Anyway, I'm glad I got here-- I read lots of easy-reading stuff but to get a fic which makes me think once and awhile, I am truly happy  :-*

LUB YOU!!

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Re: Confessions Of Teenage Lifes [Chapter 1; July 8 - 2008]
« Reply #20 on: 28 July 2008, 12:30:09 »
Update porfavor, kthx. :)

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« Reply #21 on: 30 July 2008, 21:41:03 »
Hey Maria! :D
I am Cathrin,I am glad to meet you and glad to read your story...I must say that I looooove the descriptions you make,it is like I can see what is happening in front of me!Ladyyy,you have talent,I must say! :P

Well,bump whenever you can,cause I have seen that you have exams right?
Kisses! :-* :-*
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Re: Confessions Of Teenage Lifes [Chapter 1; July 8 - 2008]
« Reply #22 on: 2 August 2008, 00:50:25 »
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Raxxie: Hi Razzie; I'm pretty good thanks, I have started my summer job and is soon ending it. I guess there really gone a long time since I updated last. I apologize. I totally get you when you say that it's hard to times, because year as young we want to has as much fun we can't, but also want our relationship to go well. Sometimes some don't think about the relationship at all, and other alot. I think it's about finding the middle thing here. Don't be to much together, but don't ever stop being together and care for your realtionship. You know the drill. Well Portugal was great, I love it - definitely a place I would love to visit again. There is alot of hot guys and really sweet people. Definitely a place you should visit. I'm so glad you like the story, I have a lot of ideas for it and by not update every single day I hope your interest will stay here. Rain also relates me to the death, and I love the innocent aura about it, it seem so beautiful. I'm glad you caught the calming energy in it, because it was what this chapter was all about, just calm and telling how it is after such a sudden death. I'm glad you think it's different, because it really is, I think there is many other non-footballer fic on here, soo.. I hope you will like the next part - it's my favorite chapter so far. Love you. :-*

seekingperfection: Pragya; Oh I loved your comment, you are such a good commenter. LOL. I have been good - I'm soon finished with my summerjob and then I will go to Copenhagen to visit my roommate from the school I went to. Then we will do some shopping and catching up. Then I will go to a birthday, thrown by a girl I lived in house with, so I will get to catch up with the other girls too. Then I will start in school on Auguest 13. Bujar - not really much into that. You know what I have made? I have made small stories so I can remember them when it's their time to come. You see it's not only Annabella's who had a secret - almost every single person in the neighbourhood has a secret; from the Johnson couple, to Annabella's brother, Mike Hamilton and so on.. It's all a mystery! I soo glad you liked the descriptions, because that's really what I do best. Ah I really want you guys to smell the rain and the water full flowers, and hear the dripping from the picket fence and tree house. The atmosphere in this chapter was meant to be seen like you are an outsider coming to the neighbourhood, and there is nothing there only empty - but maybe you just catch a glimpse of a kid watching TV or Mike Hamilton standing by the window, looking concerned out all over. The paragraph you mention was meant like seeing the chance from the days she is looking back on in the introduction and now when she is death. Like the things is not as it used to be. You liked the last bit the most - I thought I did a crappy job on that one. Jesus it was the only thing I did not liike about this chapter, but i could just not descripe it differently. Oh Pragya sweetie, Annabella is not a new character, it's the girl who killed herself - sorry for not making it clear in the introduction. She is the one says the last lines, the lines you liked the most. I know I'm crappy to update, but I just need to write the next chapter and then the hard times will be over. It's just hard because I don't know how to write it, but will see on it Sunday because then I have the day of. Thank you for commenting and I love you long time. :-*

PiriPiri Pez: Hey Sweetie. Miss talking to you, it's such a long time ago since we really talked. I don't think we have talked since you came home from Florida, how was your trip by the way? It's okay you didn't see the update, I'm crappy updating anyway. I'm glad you liked the update - I'm glad you captured the sadness and the affection of Annabella's death. She really did affect the people around her, but the affection can also turn out to be good sometimes, you'll see what I mean. Love you hunnie. :-*

Lydia: Hi Lydz. I'm good too - though the summer vacation is finished in 13 days. Sadly. Aww I'm glad you are happy whoever you are with, as long as they treat you right. Argh you work at the same place as Ze, it must be horrible when you have a child together, ain't it? All though it's great you can be his boss. LOL. Uh you had a good vacation? Was Dan with you - tell me all about it. It's okay you can keep up when you are on vacation I totally know how it is. I'm working in a toy store close to the beach, and it's hot in Denmark so you can smell the ocean air and you just want to go to the beach, instead of sweating in that store! I almost always end up re-writing my chaps - but then it gets better. LOL. Glad you didn't find the chapter boring and glad I reminded you about you car - cars always look nice when they are washed and clean. I don't hope you from now on think Mike Hamilton is a creepy guy, because if you remember the girls thought he was quite handsome. OMG I love the sound of the rain to, it's so relaxing, but outside it's a bommer. Enrique's album is great I think and I just love that song, the rain is in there too so. Hope you will like the next update - Love you hun, and thanks for commenting. :-*

Gracy: What's up Gracebear? Miss you so much, we haven't been talking much lately, sadly. Hey I remembered you this time, can't believe I mssed it. I hate being late and miss someone's reply on here, maybe a phone call or a text mesage - I hate forgetting. Gracy I may be good at writing descriptions, but you are hell good at writing dialouges and I'm though out shit to that. LOL. So I'm really glad you liked the descriptions. Sorry for missing your reply last time, and hope you like the update and thanks for commenting. Love Ya. :-*

kei_sainter: Hey apple pie. It okay you waited a day without commenting, Haha it's not like I'm good to update you know. Ahh I'm glad you like my telling about Madeira and it's hot boys. HAHA. Is it snowing in AUS? Here it's hot as hell, so a little cool wind wouldn't be a disaster for me just tomorrow and then I have the day off and then it can be sunny again. It amused me there was not many Cristiano Ronaldo shirts walking around, but well maybe it was just because I was there only for a week and maybe they don't really go with them when there is not a match, who knows. There actually is a lot of touris and they are good at English, but I don't think the tourist comes because of Ronaldo. I know this past chapter maybe did come across as a bit TOO quiet, that's why I got Mike into it, just to tell a bit why it was so quiet and then the parents and the kids, if you know what I mean? I know I do alot of descriptions here, but it's what I'm best at - dialouges aren't my strongest site, but it will slow down when I go into writing about the girls summer holiday. I won't throw an apple on you, only if you not soon update again even though you updated today, then you should update again soon - Por favor. Thanks for reading and commenting and ope you like the next bit. Love you long time apple pie. :-*

Cathrin+Victor: Hello Cathrin, how are you? - Glad to see another face in my fiction and very much thanks for reading and glad you liked it. Hope you will comment ones again after reading the next bit. I'm glad you like the descriptions and that you can see everything for you, it's why I made it so despribed. I don't have exams anymore, long time again - now I'm just another crappy updater. LOL. But I finally got around to it. Thanks again for commenting it mean alot. :-*

Yes then I'm finished with them, and the next chapter is up afterwards.

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« Reply #23 on: 2 August 2008, 01:26:00 »
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Chapter 2
The Pieces Don't Fit Anymore

A light breeze hit the big oak in the backyard of Madison Lane number 650, coursing a branch to hit the roof window with a loud bang. Gabriella Stevenson woke up by the sudden disturbance, and as she opened her eyes, a blinding light hit her eyes with such a force; she had to close them again. She rubbed her hands in her eyes, and looked at the alarm clock. She did not realise the light came from her window, and the constant rain had finally come to an end.

She pulled her duvet to the side and stood out of bed, trembling. She looked down herself, she was wearing her light blue pyjamas; with brown monkeys, and yellow bananas on. She had been wearing this, the past nine days ? not caring or having the strengths to change it. She made her way to the mirror, standing in the corner of the room. Her blond hair was put in a messy clod, and you could still see the almost invisible black streaks on her cheeks, from the mascara she had been wearing at the funeral. She looked away down on the floor, and forced herself to put the thought in the back of her head ? something she had a hard time doing.

She took a step back and turned to the window, to look at the rain there had flooded down the past nine days. When she looked up, and the light met her again, her eyes widened and for a minute her figure froze. A tear felt from pure happiness, as she ran to the window and opened it with such a force it would have felt of, if the house had been old.

As the fresh air hit her, she breathed out ? a breath there was so deep it was like she hadn?t breathed though all this time. She could finally hear the birds singing again, and hear the bees buzzing. She could see the lake in the park, there was shining because of the sun rays, there were falling down on it. The swings in the backyard was swinging lightly from the breeze there had finally hit Oak Point, and the wooden house was almost dry from all the raindrops. 

She suddenly felt the hungriness, there had been growing inside her. She could hear how her stomach was rumbling, and having forgotten the clock and lost the count of days, she took her matching monkey slippers on and wandered down stairs ? entering the kitchen noiseless. Here she found her parents and little sister, sitting by the diner table ? covered with breakfast, looking at her surprised when she stumbled and had to grab hold on one of the counters, to not fall. She then realised it was Sunday, a day she use to love because of this certain happening.

Every Sunday her mother would make an amazing breakfast for her family. They would stay there all morning, talking about random stuff as; school, friends, sport, work, and spare time ? whatever came to their minds. But suddenly Gabriella had stopped coming, she would either lay in bed with a hangover, or be at her boyfriend?s place. A thing her mother had tried to talk to her about, but Gabriella had swept away with an annoyed answer. She realised how her behaviour had change since moving to Oak Point ? a change she couldn?t really figure out if she liked or not. She missed talking to her family like old times, and she missed being hungry and eating whatever she wanted.

She sat down on the chair beside her mother?s. She smiled and for the first time since the news, she spoke to someone. ?I don?t believe I have ever been so hungry, what do you have to offer mom?? She placed her one foot on the chair and relaxed her head on her knee, and looked at her mother, who had her eyes full of tears. She hugged her daughter tightly and began handing her different things from around the table, something which made Gabriella smile.

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A couple of houses down were Leah Jones sitting in her windowsill, dressed in her nightgown. She had sat there looking at the rain, the last couple of days ? hoping to soon see the sun caressing the street again. But now the sun had hit Oak Point, she wasn?t sure she wanted it there ? she was not sure if she liked the sun or the rain more.

A small knock sounded on the door. Leah closed her eyes for a short moment to gather her thoughts, when her mother slightly opened the door and looked inside. She opened the door completely and walked in with a tray completed with; a cup of tea, a cinnamon roll ? and a little rose, put in a little vase beside. She put it down on her desk, beside her computer, and gave her a small smile before leaving the room.

Leah looked at the small rose, put in the little transparent vase, standing on the tray. She hit her head carefully against the wall behind her, as a tear rolled down her cheek. The rose was Annabella?s favourite flower ? her favourite flower because she had ones seen Sarah ? Leah?s mother, doing her gardening on a sunny spring afternoon, when they were about ten years old. She had told Sarah that she had never seen such beautiful roses as the ones on her bush ? and that little rose now standing in that vase, was from that very same bush as Annabella had loved so much.

Another tear hit her innocent face, when she saw the memory book, lying on her bedside table. She slid down from the windowsill, and made her way to the bed. She sat down slowly and took the square pink book, with a picture on the cover of her and Annabella standing in Mrs. Jones garden, the summer before this. They had a tan and were smiling happily, standing under the big cherry tree. Annabella had made it for her, as a part of her Christmas gift. She loved it with every single feeling in her body ? there was now so weak, as it had never been before.

She opened it slowly, and led the memories flood though her mind, all whilst the tears was rolling down her cheeks. She touched every single page of the book ? taking it up to her nose, to smell the scent of Annabella, who had sprayed the whole book with her perfume, and told Leah; now you will remember me forever. Something there was also written on the very last page of the book.

She looked at the tray on her desk. It wouldn?t hurt to eat something - her stomach was beginning to rumble anyway. She took a bite of the cinnamon roll, and felt how the hungriness was rolling over her. She took a cautious sip of her tea, and never before had strawberry tea tasted so good. She looked at her computer ? a thing she had not touched in the last nine days. She pressed on the start bottom slowly ? 12 new messages, appeared on the screen. She clicked on the read sign ? first message on the computer was from Gaby sent: May 23 2007 ? 08:55 am; Lee ? can we meet at your place after dinner? She quickly replied, and asked Gaby to tell the other girls.

She scrolled down ? a couple of commercial, and a letter from the school, something she didn?t bother to read. A newsletter from GreenPeace.com ? something Victoria once signed her up for. Some more commercial, and then the last message; Annabella Montez ? May 14 2007 ? 09:17 pm; LEAH! Please come over ? I?m dying of boringness, come watch a movie with me.

Leah took a step back and placed her small hands in front of her mouth. She sat down on the bed at a snail's pace, and then she broke down ? she cried and she cried. It felt like forever before her mother came into the room and hugged her tightly. So tightly Leah felt like a newborn child, in its mother?s warm embrace.   

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Across the street, in Megan Foster?s backyard, the family was enjoying a late breakfast except for Megan, who was kicking her football upwards the tall white picket fence, leaning up to a garden on another street. It was tired and sloppy kicks, but Megan didn?t care about the football ? she was just trying to move her attention from the garden beside theirs. But she couldn?t help but look at the big pool, covered with a plastic foil ? and with the four missing deck chairs, there usually was standing there.
 
Ben Foster was looking at his daughter concerned. He had never seen her in this state before ? not that he blamed her, but he was missing his little sunflower ? kicking her ball through the grass and into the goal, he had build for her. She was not wearing her favourite t-shirt anymore ? a Liverpool shirt he had gotten her when he had been in England, with number 8 on the back; Steven Gerrard ? her favourite player.

A loud vibrator sounded from her cell phone, there was lying on the big dark wooden table. Megan ignored it, but her father did not. ?Sunflower ? your phone got a text message.? He said quietly, looking at her ? still kicking the ball against the tall white picket fence. She didn?t answer nor did she look at him ? she just kept kicking the ball. He looked down on the screen, hoping it was from one of the three other girls ? and bingo it was. ?Megan ? it?s from Gabriella.? He said firmly this time ? she was going to check that message, whether he was going to do it for her or not. But as soon as she heard Gabriella?s name she was alive ? she ran to the phone and took it of her father?s hand.

Megs ? Leah?s after dinner, okay? She quickly text back and grabbed an apple ? the first thing she had eaten in days. Her mom and dad looked curiously at her, but she did not tell them anything. She just stormed up on her room ? and locked the door behind her.

Finally ? finally she got away from that garden ? finally she got away from her father?s stare ? and finally she would see her friends again. She slid down the door and pulled her knees close to her stomach, and rested her head on them ? this was something she had really needed.

She closed her eyes and remembered the folders her coach had given her, just in case the girls changed their minds, during summer. She stood up and went to her closet, where she had put them, so the girls wouldn?t find them, and think she was about to take off to football camp ? instead of spending the vacation with them in Boston.

There were three different camps ? one in Mexico ? one in Florida ? and one in Californian. She looked though all three, but she kept returning to the one in Mexico, and mind her, she wanted to get as far away from Oak Point as possible ? as far away from Madison Lane as possible ? and as far away from that garden she couldn?t possibly get! She actually needed training too ? so just in case they decided to drop the Boston trip, she had a plan B to get away.   

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On the front porch of Nymphedora was Victoria Harlem sitting. She was wearing a tank top and a pair of tiny shorts. She was eating a piece of bread, with jam on ? piece by piece. Her mother was watching her from the window ? not knowing her daughter had already seen her. She was worried ? not that there was something new to that, she often spend her time worrying about her daughter.

She didn?t understand Victoria could not act respectable, like a real lady. She didn?t understand why she found it fashionable to walk around with a messy ponytail, with her bang hanging a bit everywhere. Her beautiful ebony black hair ? there could be brushed to silk ? and catch attention of proper boys, instead of those rocker types, she was hanging around.

Sahara was looking from behind her mother. She was worried about her little sister ? she had never seen Victoria sitting so quietly, just staring out into the blue. Her drained face, where the tears had sat their marks ? her stare, which was usually looking deeper, was now empty and full of nothingness ? her before sulking expression, was now making endless sobs.

She usually didn?t talk to well with her sister ? actually there relationship was pretty bad. It was properly because they were so different. Victoria had black hair ? Sahara had blond. Victoria had dark brown eyes ? Sahara had ocean blue eyes. Victoria was a tiny girl ? Sahara was tall, and had curves the right places. Victoria liked the rock style ? Sahara liked pop. Victoria loved animals ? Sahara hated them. She could go on and on about them being different, but what would the point be ? their relationship would not get better of that reason.
 
She snapped out of her thoughts, as Victoria yelled from outside; ?LEAVE ME ALL ASSHOLES!? Victoria looked annoyed as her mother and sister disappeared from the window. Why could they not just leave her alone ? just this one time? What was up with her family anyway? Her mother hated Annabella, of that simple reason Annabella hated fur as much as Victoria, and had once uttered her opinion to Mrs. Harlem.

Suddenly her cell phone blinked ? a message from Gabriella. She sat up quickly and read it; Vicky ? Leah?s after dinner, okay? A meeting ? something she had been afraid of, not because she didn?t want to see the girls again ? but because she knew that this conversation was about their summer holiday ? something she deadly wanted to avoid.

She leaned back and took another piece of her bread ? this was something she needed to fight for, but something she was afraid she was losing!

?Pieces don?t fit anymore, the question are what does it mean? That something doesn?t belong together anymore ? that something is falling apart ? that something is broken? In this case, being my friends ? revolved around all three things. See there had already happened changes in all four of the girls lives, they just didn?t know it yet. Gabriella discovered how much she missed her family ? Leah found that deadly mail from me that would make her feel so guilty that she may even think, it was her fault I killed myself ? Megan didn?t know it yet, but she had already decided how to spend her holiday ? and at last Victoria, she worried so much that an anger was rising in the back of her mind.?
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[Author's Note; Sorry for taking so long updating, you can listen to the song if you want to, just another song to insprirate. This is my favorite chapter so far, so I hope you like it. Happy reading folks. :-*]
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« Reply #24 on: 5 August 2008, 10:05:02 »
Oh! Finally an update for godsakes! :P :P ::)

I'll comment tomorrow, seeing that it's midnight and my brain isn't functioning well enough to leave you a well deserved comment. :)

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« Reply #25 on: 5 August 2008, 11:32:49 »
Wow!
It may have been a while to wait for your'e Second chapter, but by gum it was worth it, i loved how everything now seem's so pretty and fresh and all the flowers should be growing, it's a kind of sigh that things are slowly but surely becoming okay?, y'know like the rain suggested Death and hurt, pain, wheras the sun shining suggest's many things like happiness, power, life, desire, youre chapters are so great honestly it felt like i was there!
I deffinately get this feeling of Desperate housewives, you know when at the end or the start when it just flicks through everybody's houses showing what's happening and things? it felt like that in my mind, the end of a desprate housewives show, but great because im kind of addicted to desperate housewive, speaking of which do you know the next series is ment to be 5 years into the future? fabulous!!.

I also love the end paragraph.
?Pieces don?t fit anymore, the question are what does it mean? That something doesn?t belong together anymore ? that something is falling apart ? that something is broken? In this case, being my friends ? revolved around all three things. See there had already happened changes in all four of the girls lives, they just didn?t know it yet. Gabriella discovered how much she missed her family ? Leah found that deadly mail from me that would make her feel so guilty that she may even think, it was her fault I killed myself ? Megan didn?t know it yet, but she had already decided how to spend her holiday ? and at last Victoria, she worried so much that an anger was rising in the back of her mind.?

Kind of showing that she had a effect on all of them, not just in a upsetting way but deep down, i love how Leah now has this deathly message type thing, was this on the same day as she died? because then i can understand, i actually wonder why she commited suicide.
anyway great update, cant wait for more.

Raxxie.
;-*

seekingperfection

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Re: Confessions Of Teenage Lifes [Chapter 2; August 1. - 2008]
« Reply #26 on: 17 August 2008, 02:01:15 »
Hey Maria! I've been really busy lately, but I'll comment as soon as I have time! Sorry! :(

cr9girl

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Re: Confessions Of Teenage Lifes [Chapter 2; August 1. - 2008]
« Reply #27 on: 14 August 2009, 00:20:16 »
aww. what happened to this? you should update again!!